"Beautiful, beautiful"

[SUCCESSOR]

Maybe not the lucky few
but still in small ways lucky too.
through the quarrelous feud
living on my lovely, dirty pew.
We're nothing new.

Still I pine of romance
that picture perfect world of those
belly laughs and gestures
Marking our made in heaven match "I do"
Maybe still so untrue.

Still shaking off
these first glimpse delicate whims
of hopeful life of giving in
But move on to pretend we want to live it again
Every now and then

Sometimes I wonder
If theres supposed to be something
In you eyes
Sometimes I ponder
If I'll ever really know the meaning
of "love life"


The darkest greys I nightly face
I seek escape in your comfortable face
It rest there in my memory
Beautiful, beautiful

My demons haunt my blaring wants
You never say what I think or want
Your too strong for me to face
Beautiful, beautiful


Sometimes I think I'm the perfect romantic
Sometimes I think I'm an ignorant jerk
I sometimes wish I were a stoic


I've promised you too many times
That I'd overcome myself
So many hindrences to bring me down
But I've promised you myself

...
I wanna run away from it all
Before the fall
The fall away from you
I wanna run away from it all
To the call
To the call of you
Beautiful, beautiful


::to my one and only. Still a rough draft but I'm sure it all makes sense. I rather sure I'm not speaking out of my ass but I won't know time a read through at more awake times.

[Beldaran]

Quite, quite good actually. Well done. You have a style that reminds me of wet crystal; clear, refreshing, and full of worth, and by that I mean you aren't just rambling like an over poetic hack, but you are actually saying something.

[TheGeepster]

I can't quite figure out the rhythm of some of it, but it reads quite well, Successor. Good job.

[moocow]

Awesome, yo. :)

[SUCCESSOR]

Originally posted by TheGeepster
I can't quite figure out the rhythm of some of it, but it reads quite well, Successor. Good job.

Yeah I figured the rhythm might be off. I was tired and well caffinated. ehh either way I'm fuckin' happy so I won't point the fact that you mistyped my name. haha j/k I'll revise it someday and repost it. Or I might get lazy and never touch it again. Either wayI have no Idea.

[Ich]

I like it, and I could tell you were tired before you said it. It seems you revised one part of your post at the bottom and didn't make the rest agree with it, which I usually catch when I'm awake.

[stormwatcheagle]

[shameless plug]Nice poem. Have you concidered entering the writing contest?[/shameless plug]