2 songs

[GuitarmanTim]

I wanna know what people think of these 2 songs I wrote, so here they are, and any feedback is welcome :)

The first is a song for classical guitar and voice I wrote for my ex-girlfriend when she told me she wasn't totally ready for a relationship. The song is called Waiting, here it is:

You don't know
and you think it's to fast
but I want you to know
that I really do care
and if you don't know
if the feeling is there
then I wan't you to know that
I will be right here
waiting

yeah I will be right here waiting

I'll be waiting untill
you make a choice, you decide
and if it doesn't work out
then that's also alright
and if it does then that's great
but I won't push you anyway
you have to go there yourself
cause I wanna hear you say
how you feel

I wanna hear you say how you feel

I understand your confused
but remember so am I
and no I'm not mad
I just don't want you to cry
And it's not really that bad
And it's not really that sad
It just gets alot harder
when I go to bed
at night

Cause I'll be thinking about you
I don't wanna but I know
that I will anyway
I can't help it
and all I want is for you
to figure out what you want
and if your ready to tell
then I will be right here
waiting

I will be right here
waiting

I will be right here
waiting...

-------------------

next, a song I wrote for the same girl, but a bit later, to let her know what she changed in me, there for this one is called Change:

Never nervous, never scared, never loved, never feared
But they don't know, don't have a clue, what I really wanna do
Always closed, overage, keeps me save from all the rage
But I never feel, never touch, never really wanted much
Then it changed, felt so strange, because you unlocked my cage
Now I'm free, you will see, this is where I'll always be

Why
Do I have to be alive
All I wanna do is cry
cause your not near me
no not near me

So here I am, what is this? All is new but I'll never miss
a thing again, cause I'm a man who's been set free, that's what you'll see.
Did I want it? Yes.
Do I want it? No.
I just hope it gets less or else I'll have to go.

Why
Does it have to be alive
You know how it feels inside
but your not near me
no not near me

Why
Do I even wanna try...

cause I know it's right to keep my pride, keep it inside, and now I slide into my frightened place I'll hide, cause you were right, I can't take the sight of your bright light, I fight my fight, against all your might, so tell me why inside I cried...
cause your not near me?
no not near me

---------------

I've written a few more, but these are my best so far, what do you all think?

[obi]

Wow, those are good songs, I like the way the first song just flows and I like you use of alliteration in the second :thumbsup:

[GuitarmanTim]

I got no idea what alliteration is but thanx :)

[Drunken Tiger]

They look great Guitarman!!

Thats some talent you got there!!!!:thumbsup:

[PrfectGREG]

There allright, a few places need work but solid none the less. But I mean I think u can think of better rymes other then sad and mad...but they get the job done..

(PS, GT... wanna go to my site and click the Link to my bands songs, and tell me what u think? I need another song writers opionons)

[UnholyFreak]

awesome songs you wrote there!

[GuitarmanTim]

thanx ya'll, and your right Greg, but hey, I'm only a rookie at this :p

[LORD APOCALYPSE]

Hey those are quite good GT!
I can hear the music to go along with them in my head just now.:bouncy: :clap: