Help me with these 2 songs...

[PrfectGREG]

I tried to write 2 songs and I think they could be better. Could some of you comment and sugest stuff to make them be better:

*A life wasted*

I spent my life playing a video game
I know most of you think that's really lame.

Many Video games are really fun
In Grand Theft Auto 3 you can shoot a gun.

Mario is an awesome guy
Pokemon kicks ass, I don't know why.

Everyone look how Sonic runs fast
I'm gunna get Yoshi to kick your ass.

Who needs friends when you got video games?

Vi-de-o Games
Vi-de-o Games
Vi-de-o Games

Nintendo was so fun I never left my house
Mario was more popular then a big eared mouse.

So many games and so little time
This song is getting hard to rhyme.

Xbox, Gamecube and Playstation Two
If you love video games say "WOO-HOO"

Zelda, Tetris, and Harvest Moon
Holy shit I am such a goon.

Who needs friends when you got video games?

Vi-de-o Games
Vi-de-o Games
Vi-de-o Games

Play em' or die!


*Long Distance Relationship*

You live so far away
I wish you'd come here to stay
You’re far away oh so far away

I don't see you enough
It can get so tough
Ohhh so very tough

I want you by my side
I should just swallow my pride
And try to get you by my side

So far away Oh So Far away

wooh hoo ho ho ooo yeah

Driving so far
In my shitty old car

Just to see your face
Your beautiful face

Do you still love me?
After I made you so unhappy

I tried my best and I gave it my all
To make you enjoy my long distance call

I got you by my side
And you swallowed your pride
Your pride oh your pride

So far away Oh So far away

wooh hoo ho ho ooo yeah

[Mak-X]

The first one was good with the way you incorporated all the video game stuff.